Hey i liked this one. I used to play in a band about a year ago that had practice's, much like the ones you are describing. It brought back alot of memories and feelings of the warm loud guitar amps and the horrible sound of an unevenly played drumset. But anyways, i liked this poem but it might be a little on the hazy side for those reading who might not have experienced this kind of setting before. Maybe you could add another stanza to show how an onlooker might feel or something.

This is a good poem. It is very captivating and it most certainly throws you into the emotion and carries you through. I enjoyed reading it. Your use of adjectives is awseome to. When you used "Cherry kisses" and "Honey scented fragrances" i really felt those words and it was nice. Keep it up.

This, for me atleast, is definitly one of the darker poems that i have read. That doesnt not keep it from being beauitul however. I guess dark and beutiful together make a word which would be "Enchanting". Even though i felt the last two lines seemed a little out of place with the overall flow they still made me rethink the entire poem, and i guess the best way to describe it would be as if you drew me in with the bait, then last two lines i realized i was chewing on a hook not just a piece o...

This seemed to have a powerful punch of America's bland emotion towards death, media, and all of the other very emotional things that dont move us like they should. I really liked this one because it was also very real, very modern sounding. The way you positioned the words "upload" and "broadcast" was really good. It showed so much meaning through the simplicity of things.

Good job with this one. I will say though that i got a little thrown out of the flow of things when i read "You left. Now I am left, alone, with just my keyboard and my imagination." Its got good meaning but i felt like the words stumbled over each other a little bit. Kind of like traffic, your still moving but not as well. Then you pulled it back together and it ended on a good note.

This writing paints a really beautiful picture in my mind. I found it very soothing and haunting in a way. Good stuff.

Jesse, you did good here bro. The last line wa really catching and its like finishing a good book, that it was so good you have to read it again and pretend that youve never read it before. I also heard your recording of this, that was even better! Love you bro.

You did so good reciting this that one night. I never really liked it all that much beforehand to be completely honest with you. But when i heard you speak it that night, the words were elegant and beutiful and i really felt the poem. One of my favourites now.

The midless purchases and receipts! The thoughts we thought we thought up on our own! The brothers are BOTH lepers! This Jesse, is a job well done. and i had to take a long deep breath and relaxing sigh after reading this. My emotinon had jumped.