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Echoes of grief flow from the Soul, she wails. Interesting that some of us can’t feel it. Reverberating in my chest, my heart beats faster, fearing for its life. I look to find the light of Hope, far off, but still twinkling, a star among blackness. There! I see it! I am alive! Look there brothers. Look there sisters. Look for that twinkle. It is alive. Living we have intruded upon the great house of the Soul. We originated as part of it, grew to resent Her, broke our ties and proceeded to br...
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spelling error in the first line, sense of humor. Also, the inclusion of Laura kind of alienates the reader, without letting them form their own Laura per se.
quite vulgar, but gets your point across...i wouldn't suggest publishing it, but perhaps a reading...
I like your way of rhyming things, very good. I deeply enjoyed the last line of this poem. The question is, can we do something in the future to better our past...perhaps an idea for a companion piece to this work.
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