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AGE:
35
LAST LOGIN: June 11
LAST LOGIN: June 11
i’m 35 and just recently changed my life. i found the man of my dreams, sold my condo, quit my job and moved 1600 miles to start my life with him.
i’m a survivor of life, as my poetry will show. and though many horrible things have befallen me, i still get up everyday and go about a semi-normal existence. my poetry helps me get the darkness out of my me.
my poetry is dark, disturbing, sad and hopefully also memorable and thought provoking.
i welcome any and all feedback. i know that my style isn’t for everyone and i hope to learn, as well as share, with others.
thanks and happy reading!
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Colors of all hues. Burnt away by the sunrise. Leaving the sky blue.
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Version 1
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Looking around, Alethia found herself in what could only be described as a ball room. Even though there was nothing but darkness all around, she was sure of the massiveness of the space before her. One full wall was nothing but windows while the opposite was mirrored; however with no moon out, the two combine to enlarged the space before her and make it grow to encompass the whole of the outside world. Her rapid breathing was lost in this room and its midnight shadows. She could still feel th...
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i like how this is a great metaphor for many things. sex, love, the struggle of night and day. i would suggest maybe a little punctuation though. it is a little hard to read and know where to make any pauses or breaks. but overall great job
i don't have any suggestions...but that is because i was laughing so hard. 10PM Play poke the Pope...best line!! you have a great sense for word play and what may seem like nonsense, in some ways makes perfect sense.
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very good. only thing i would suggest is putting in more punctuation, simply to help the reader know when to pause and where the thought/sentence ends.
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