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AGE: 34
LOC: Melbourne, FL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 05

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Short Story / innocence
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A little girl. Not a child I don't think- probably a young teen- but little in that she was childlike. I don't know where, somewhere here on the internet several years ago- a blog or chat room or something. I don't even know what she was talking about, but it made me so sad- and I never forgot what she said. I only remember one thing: "She hurted me".
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Poetry / signal-running
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.0123456789.abcdefghijklmnopqrstuvwxyz. it's a quick flight, life: cue stars, action; exit stage right.
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Poetry / we:b [x]
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in the middle of the action, it's a dance lane, life. and i think about the passion, but it's not quite right. in the midst of my composure, am i off the wheel? in the knowing of the knower, it forgot to feel. what was worried with the dreamline re-writing the web_ re-writing the web_ inside my head. in the middle of the action, it's a dream lane, life. and i think about the action on this london night]. but the words are just conclusions and the dream is just a way for confessions to be wor...
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Poetry / 9.
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Poetry / signal-running
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[23456789. it's a quick flight, life: que stars, action. exit stage right.
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Firstly, I have trouble with the whole premise- it's hard for me to enjoy a work that is based in a single metaphor (sunflowers). The poetry is a little choppy to the point where sometimes it isn't even present- make sure you have the same amount of syllables for each two rhyming lines.
Flash Fiction / The Postman
Interesting and engrossing. We learn about- or surmise things about- the characters through their action, though it leaves only precious little to do so with. I liked it as a sort of tiny slice of life. Check for typos though, there are a few.
Flash Fiction / 6 Word Contest
Not bad, but I would switch the order of the last two sentences: Words communicated. Stories procreated.
Poetry / Merging Paths
Not bad for a first draft. It seemed a bit amateurish and obvious, though. It doesn't feel completely finished, and the metaphor doesn't quite work. There should be more of a prologue, a buildup to when their paths cross, instead of saying in the first sentence "Today an important person merged onto the road I travel", and basically repeating this is the second paragraph.
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