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the rain clouds swell as the sky proceeds to cry people move faster letting the world pass them by ignerant to the world around them trying to escape the skys tears running to there own safe place running from there fears forgetting about what is right and the things there meant to do they just keep running i guess i should run too..
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Death. It is something that we are faced with everyday. Whether it been the death of another human or whether it be the death of an innocent flower. It is something that we are all familiar with. We are confronted by death everyday. But we never seem to expect that it will happen to us and the people we love. I guess for some reason we forget that death happens to everyone. Not just people we don’t know. Yet no one is ever comfortable with it. Once we reach middle age everyone starts to panic...
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wow. thats was really good i really liked it. it is very moving! i like the way you use the crossed arms and closed her eyes. as this is a traditional to do when someone dies. which i like. i also like how u havnt tried to stick to a rhyme scheme on this one as i feel that woudl take away from teh pain that you are trying to get across at losing someone you have cared about. i get the impression that this is about someone being stabbed or something like that... if this is so i love how you ha...
i like this. you dont just say what you see you use good imagery i espically like the phrase dieseal monster (as this is what a school bus is really) "Down the same 3:15 sidewalk" i really like this line as it shows the repations and the bordem that life can become. over all i like :)
well i really loved this!!!! its very different to alot of teh other stuff i have seen on here. its good that you have a diffent style as this will help you too stand out more. i love the layout of this poem as your are talking about things slipping anyway and it is allined to look as if it is all going down. this works very well (but im sure this was your intention) i also like the shortness of each line and stanza as it makes it sharp and to teh point. it makes it have more power when it is...
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