Kate felt her face burn even more. “I’m so sorry. I can’t take your money. It’s just that I lost my wallet and---“ Her gut tangled in knots, threatening to expel her barbecue. I can’t go through this again. I am out of that business. Period. Well, he doesn’t look like the kind of man to knee-cap a woman. “I heard the story.” His smile removed any sting from his words, even though he talked with his teeth slightly gritted, like that Main Line attorney she had done research for. “Could happen ...

' dug the shears into the meaty part of her inner leg. she held firm with the blade sunk deep inside of her.quick with intent she pulled the scissors toward herself and burst an artery.' That was sick and fantastic!This is something i have'nt read before and I like how you jumped into the story and most writers I know don't even go there, your brave and I hope you tell me when your next syory is coming out.

Quite impressive starting the story off with a dream that might be related to the multilated human body in the shed which is quite clever and the psychology of andy's girl friend -- her dreams which seems normal when andy asked her if it was another nightmare and she just replied like it was nothing and their cross species relationship just adds more to the story and the encampment of the mythians during the 40s which is clever,maybe you could make another agency in germany where hitler kept ...

I love the first couple line that suggest love at first sight and how shes ready to open her heart up to this man who is beyond perfection somehow but I have a feeling that the ambrosia she feels is'nt going to last this essays seems to suggest she found the man of her dreams or is it what she wants to see making her blind to his flaws, I mean this essay is great but it sounds too cli'che give the man a flaw but thats just my thought. I really do like this essay, but you got to be realistic a...

not quite sure what this is but I do like the connection your making with the teens and the teacher who does'nt probe into their live to much like parents.And I'm not sure what the plot is but thats my thought.

I thought this piece was quite hilarious shaking that damm bird but you lost in the middle of the secound page, but it was good but after shaking the bird part I did'nt understand where the story was going.

It was quite funny at first the dude who puted on the perfume I thought he was going to have a one night stand or something but this story caught me by surprise by throwing me off guard.

I like your sense of ideal and I feel that you could've added more to this quote/poem.

I really like how 'i know, you know...' '...nothing about everthing.' which is good because we think we know things but theres something new under the sun every day.

You need to focus on where you want this piece of poem to go. the first and 2nd line is great but the last one threw me off, kinda...